A Date Night Comments

You write beautifully, Ruby, with a wonderful sensitivity and this poem written any other way could have easily sounded vulgar... but it doesn't...reminds me of my own youthful days...

You didn't mention what the film was! ! !

Brilliant! Right husband.... We are off to the cinema...... Tonight! ! ! ! !

Brilliant! Right husband.... We are off to the cinema...... Tonight! ! ! ! !

Brilliant! Right husband.... We are off to the cinema...... Tonight! ! ! ! !

Brilliant! Right husband.... We are off to the cinema...... Tonight! ! ! ! !

Alistair left some lovely feedback and advice on this poem. I changed it to apply his advice. I feel the rhythm of the poem flows much better than how it was originally structured. Thank you Alistair: -)

Wow that was great. A dramatic end. They are married...+++++++ Great Write

Sensuality unlimited..the ending is great.

This is excellent Ruby and to find they are married as well... incredible. Well done.

Hello Ruby, I really enjoyed your lovely piece, it was a lovely ditty, The fun rhyme scheme here ads to the fun the narrator and conspirator are enjoying, and I found it to be refreshing clean fun. The world needs more like that. I wondered if it wouldn't bennefit the reader if you didn't start each line with a cap, but rather each sentence or new idea. might add to the rhythm and flow. That said I really did enjoy this lovely piece. Kudos. Al.

As opposed to all my other poems Thomas: ^P

We'll see how long we last here Red.....no rude words tho! Lol: -)

Sometimes. But this is indecently more than just happily. Should they be having so much fun?