A Cycle Comments

This poem is simple. It is also prosaic. That is because it has no rhythm. It sounds like you are just talking, explaining, but not poetically. Even free verse must have a little music to it. If it does, it will touch you - that is the test of a good poem.

'...time between rise and fall...' More power to you, Scarlet!

Wonderful poem with a great message. Every moment of our lives are priceless. We should not waste it. keep writing

Simple but not simplistic.Those who follow the message of this poem will lead productive lives. Good write.

A nice poem with nice metaphors. Love it.

this poem is the most.... realest poem! its really great

i agree with karina! this is a great message and i hope many read this and pass it on

Making a difference between rise and fall to complete life's cycle. Very nice message. Thanks!