A Cry From Within Comments
A captive to stark loneliness
He had only dark shadows for company
Wandering aimless from place to place
with the burden of years on his back
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Creative piece and vivid imagery. When one reache old age the soul may become wear I think. :-
Thank you for you comment on my work.August vistor. It made me smile beoz u can relate with. Cheers
good-hearted beings are always around to care for us....we need to seek their help....poem to poem you prove your skill greatly Valsa...you are very versatile....
At some stage of life everyone has to cross such a lonely state of mind due to bad luck and problems....we do need a shoulder to lean and share our sorrow.....but this phase of life gives a huge space for us to introspect too...
Valsa- - - - - - -you are mistress of the art of imagery.. I am so often stunned by your wellturned phrases and on-the-spot-descriptives that give us such lasting images- - - - - - - - - - - - with the burden of years on his back - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - A drift wood thrown ashore on a crowded beach - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - in a life boat without oars - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -A heartfelt cry on behalf of the lost who come seeking an escape from the damp tunnels and hollows of solitude - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - You are the voice of conscience among us. Thank you for these powerful poems that you write and share with us.... A million 10's would never be enough.
Susan you make me feel important....! Of course it is a nice feeling! But I genuinely wonder if I deserve so much! You are great enough to make others feel great! It is a quality many lack....! You have a wonderful way of expression, inimitable and unique! Thank you sweet friend!
You have captured the man's loneliness and desolation in saturated poignancy. Great imagery too in the narrative. (10)
Someone must express a friendly word. Let no one feel lonely in the world. The poem brings a real problem to light.
a poem of concern for all the lonely people who feel lost in an ever changing selfish world? ..............well written.
Thank you so much Tom! People live in solitary islands, feeling miserably cut off from the main stream!
Beautiful and compassionate. Lonliness is a curse that grips so many of us today. It catches us ofguard to spread like a dark cloud. I salute a heart that cries for it and does something to show a way for escape. Your rhythm and language are as always impressive. Thank you for sharing such a wonderful poem. I also noticed your name in the list of 500 poets. Congratulations! So proud and happy for you.
Yes loneliness has now become an epidemic, subduing the young and the old. If we can give a little of our time, it might save many lives. Thank you Savita for your beautiful words of appreciation!
Lonley and unloved! ! Loneliness. Thanks for sharing thisd poem with us.
A heart-touching poem. To get into someone's else shoes, to see life through another's eyes....how skillfully n beautifully you have done it. Loneliness is unfortunately v common. The reader can feel the pain of this lonely man, many will identify with him. We all need a soulmate. That's very human. A poignant n thoughtful write. A10
Thank you Nosheen! Your comments are always a delight to go through! Loneliness is often painful. Each one needs a few, at least one with whom he/she can share the joys and sorrows of everyday living and in whom he/she can put complete trust
What a beautiful poem with a great message, everybody needs somebody at times. A powerful piece. loved it. Annette
Until the god is with us, No one is lonely. Diverting out my mind towards an hobbies or devotion can come out of loneliness, This is my personal experience. Nice Writing, nice Dedication Who Feels lonely mam, You may read my poem on loneliness.thank you.
Thank you Vaidyanathan! Yes, I shall read your poem on a similar topic!
There are so many such people in this world, people who feel utterly lonely and unloved. If we can show that we care for them, it will give them a new lease of life! .....................If we can do that it will be the best worship. A nice message in a thoughtful poem.
Thank you Akhtar ji! Yes, with a change of heart, much can be done individually and collectively to help those suffering from the sores of neglect and isolation!
In a row boat without oars.Do we feel for these people from guilt or pity or maybe for the same reason that no child in danger is a stranger to us. Nor any man or woman. Something in our humanity cries out for people that would not be alone in a family, a tribe or a community small enough to care as neighbors. Civilization however allows people to become anonymous and the governments problem. What can we do as individuals? ....much. A ripple joined by others may help his boat to shore. We can all do so much more............exquisitely penned tribute. Very inspirational and humbling.
So glad to see your comment and thanks a lot. In the rat race for money and power, man is often reduced to an anonymous entity! No one has time to care for another. This is very sad and all around us there are people marooned on lonely islands. As you believe, much can be done to help them. What is needed is a humane attitude
Great poem and also great poet's note. Your big heart is showing through, Valsa.
Thank you Kim for your beautiful comment and seeing me as a person of a 'big heart'!
Thank you, Valsa ji. You have taken up cudgels on behalf of people who are virtually cut off from this world. They need to be loved, cared and reassured of their worth in the society. I quote: He had only dark shadows for company /....A drift wood thrown ashore ....He feels like a sailor / in a life boat without oars
Definitely such marginalized people, always ignored and taken for granted suffer from a sense of isolation. The relatively comfortable section of the society should never try to aggravate their sense of loneliness, instead they should come to the rescue of such lonely souls from falling into depression. Even a kind word or an attentive ear may go a long way in helping them. Thank you Rajnish sir for your wonderful and sensitive comment!
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line 15 I like " commiserative* soul" . * adjective 1 " feeling or expressing sympathy" 2 " Feeling or expressing pity" I enjoyed stanza 1. Regarding Poet's Notes: I volunteer to help the women,25 -55. bri :)