Friday, August 24, 2012

A Cry From The Gate Comments

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A belly, heaving, a body that shivered in cold
A cry so distant, piecing hearts gone cold
Its head, veins ran like ropes, tying fire wood
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Charles Jagongo
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Suelynn Walters 29 August 2012

This is an excellent poem and I love the way it tells a story here. Keep up the excellent work Charles!

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Leslie Philibert 24 August 2012

A very fine poem, with lots of strong imagery and fine lines. Just one small point, I would delet the commas after never and experienced in the last verse, perhaps use less commas, but that is your choice of course. A very good poem.

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Charles Jagongo

Charles Jagongo

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