A belly, heaving, a body that shivered in cold
A cry so distant, piecing hearts gone cold
Its head, veins ran like ropes, tying fire wood
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A very fine poem, with lots of strong imagery and fine lines. Just one small point, I would delet the commas after never and experienced in the last verse, perhaps use less commas, but that is your choice of course. A very good poem.
This is an excellent poem and I love the way it tells a story here. Keep up the excellent work Charles!