Sunday, April 20, 2008

A Cool Sweet Breath Comments

Rating: 5.0

The sky breathes into my lungs
A cool sweet breath
A radiant sun hides shyly
Behind her sheer silver veils
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Julie Arnoult
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Sulaiman Mohd Yusof 20 April 2008

a bittersweet write.......with talent

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Dr.subhendu Kar 20 April 2008

And the sky breathes through my clothes A cool sweet breath.......................................bedazzled by the imagery when lucid with ingenuity yet smooching sui-generis,10/10, thanks for sharing

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Very fine poem, very rich in olfactory and visual elements. They are symbolic too, and there's a narrative sensuality.

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Julie Arnoult

Julie Arnoult

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