A Cold Blow Comments

Tara- Very nicely done, reminds me a bit of Billy Collins, reads almost like a conversation which makes it real and not 'stilted.' You certainly have a way of plumbing the depths of the mind/ senses!

As a fellow Canadian, I was hoping to read something about the cold of the north where I come from. Above Sudbury. Miss it sometimes. Adeline

Wow, you do have a thorough way of describing life. And I feel that you want to be understood, not just using vague adjectives to sound verbose. Again I truly enjoyed this. Adeline

In the middle of the poem, the speaker is still operating under self-delusion, and says the bag is not burden because it's what they want to believe. At the end, they have begun to acknowledge that the weight of self-expectation and what they consider to be unfulfillment, is more than they were first willing to admit.

This is honest, told again in an original voice that puts me right over your shoulder. (Yet ANOTHER question: in the middle of the poem, you say your 'bag' is no burden. At the end, you acknowledge that it definitely IS. Was the first meant as merely a rhetorical flourish?)

Truly enjoyed this read, very nicly done....