A Coffin To The Lady And A Breath To The Lover Comments

excellent poem! well worded and put together

I like this poesy) >< great one/ nice interpretation! ! !

amazing work........................everysentece has a wonderful meaning..

Thoughtfully woven title...true to the depictions inside...beautiful!

wonderfully worded. it show the spiritual torture well.

I like your poems read my poems also thank u

i'm totaly impressed ! ! it's a dramatic story told through lines of true feelings.. every life has its own bitter moments, but POETRY can make it better.. Bravo, Rania & thanks4sharing this ! !

Rania it's a splendid poem i like the title, the thoughts and the way you write there is a big connection in every verse about that dramatic poetry scene you are a very powerful poetess keep on to another good work 10+++

This is kind of embarising, but at much as I enjoy reading this poem, I don't understand it.

Hi Rania - you have chosen an interesting structure for this poem with a very interesting title. It consists of 13 couplets each one of which takes us further and further down a path of despair - degradation and destruction as befits the title. For the structure (there is also a consistent rhyming pattern) and content I score it a TEN. V 1 Delusion snd pretence V 2 Hypocracy and cunning V 3 Explanation V 4 Bad news! She will depart V 5 Woe! Confession and rejection V 6 Hard luck! The lady has departed. V 7 The lady becomes silent and insensitive V 8 Dumb insolence and rejection V 9 Left in torture - She has gone - no answer - No justification V 10 Shall he forgive? or V 11 Shall he crush? or V 12 Shall he burn? V 13 'For the shock! He had done nothing (which is sometimes worse than doing something) - then came the breeze - proffering the lady a coffin -and a breath to the lover - to help departing'. Not a very pleasant out come. Sometimes we destroy be neglect and indifference. Love you in Poetry - JOHN

great poem, well done 10+