Thursday, May 16, 2013

A Canvas Of Failure Comments

Rating: 4.5

My life a canvas of failure
never get what I desire

Wings of my dreams they curb
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Soumita Sarkar
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Unnikrishnan E S 28 February 2017

Hi Soumita, Unburdened, Sure! How do you judge an event as your failure? I would say, it is your deliberate omission to do something, which was within your powers to do. None of the events, I presume, could be counted as your failures. They are definitely, catastrophes. Fate has played havoc with your life. And life is not about such catastrophes. Nor about lying down, licking your wounds. It is not about dreams burnt to ashes. It is about how you rise from their ashes like a phoenix. You have proved through your poems that you are capable of doing that. Just go ahead and prove it to the world. Prove it to yourself. Wish you best!

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Mithilesh Yadav 09 February 2016

Only the brave and strong pen will be able to be so TRUE..... integrity is a hard training a pen should undergo and you have trained your pen well mam....... liked the innocence way of expression..... thanx for sharing

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Souren Mondal 08 November 2015

I think this is one of the most poignant and frank confessional poems I have read submitted by a member here at Poemhunter... The kind of directness with which the statements are made is very courageous... I also loved how you structured the poem, with each stanza talking about a particular 'failure'.... Thanks for sharing...

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Ramesh Rai 24 June 2015

This is really very touching but failure does not mean the end of life. Perhaps God desires you for some other purpose. Keep patience keep writing you are bestowed with unique talent of God that is creative in nature. if you listen my failures you will laugh. Still i think to do best. Wish you all the best. Some day i will tell you about me. Thanks for share. +10

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Bri Edwards 12 October 2013

i DON'T agree with sawmitra roy's comment. i think a personal poem about personal trials or triumphs is fine. i hope this poem is not based truly on your life. good luck in the future if it is. younger/blunder....i like it. i mean i think it is a good rhyme, though not what i would usually think of as one. those who can't do....teach. i've heard that before. unfortunately there are teachers who lack a certain competence for teaching. as for teaching instead of doing....teaching is VERY important! of course i have thought, since leaving school, that school, for many, was a babysitting experience for the most part. and that is not to say babysitting kids is bad, especially with so many working moms and single-parent homes etc. i am speaking as an american. so, assuming for now that the poem is an accurate picture of your life....or not...how about writing us a poem to tell us what you plan to do to turn your life around......or accept it with less negative feelings? thanks for sharing. :)

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Soumita Sarkar 09 May 2015

I appreciate your suggestion...certainly shall do so.....Thanks...Edwards.

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The Moody Blue 03 July 2013

All mankind love a lover, , , , , , , , , but y did ya stated that u fell in love wid a younger one & it was a blunder? i mean do we really fall in love by seeing age n ol other reasons? ? ? Tis a good poem

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Soumita Sarkar 09 May 2015

Just life experience.....life didnt offer me chance to get mingled with the first mate......

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Bolah Lawal 08 June 2013

poignant! i love the rhymes, meters and the style. well done dear.

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Soumita Sarkar 09 May 2015

Thanks.....Sir.

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Biswajit Basu 16 May 2013

The relentless adversities in your life gush out in the poignant words of your poetry.

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Sawmitra Roy 16 May 2013

nice work Soumita...but the poem should be more universal in order to make it more appreciable...this is not a criticism but a idea to make your poems more appealing....some lines are great..my life is a canvas of failure...providance must be little kind from universality i mean the subject of your poem should be more common to people and reader should feel as if it is his/her problem...

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