A Brief Romance Comments

No matter how hard you try some romances will not survive time. A 10.

I just read the poem again and yes, a brief romance, if there is such a word I would call it A Distancing. It demonstrates quite well the feelings of one that I am presuming would have like that the romance would have lasted longer.

Excellent poem written here Tan.

Very poetic, well written and explicit. Love cannot stand the constant tempest of the sea and its surroundings. You take us there and we feel your feelings everywhere. Quite an excellent piece.X

What caused deep currents of guilt? If they were't able to resolve that (the guilt) , then better that it was short.

Long stretch of silence can affect relationships. Only communication can bring back the spark of love.

A refined poetic imagination, Tan. You may like to read my poem, Love And Lust. Thank you.

My goodness, Tan, this is awfully beautiful! For those who experience silence and fire in relationships, this piece will speak straight to the heart and mind. You are very good at finding metaphoric images to demonstrate the message. You should develop it and work on it. You have a passion for a great poet. Looking forward to read more of your poems.

Well written on love but circumstances prevent to express it the person.. Good metaphors used +++10

Such an elegant poem! I truly am amazed by it, I love it so much! Good job :)

Such a great poem! I really enjoyed it...

In an elegy for a friend who perished at sea, Tennyson wrote, BETTER TO HAVE LOVED AND LOST THAN NEVER TO HAVE LOVED AT ALL.Your reminded of Tennyson's obvious true words. I can feel the sweetness of this brief romance from your imagery and I feel the hurt of its loss vicariously. But your poem also proves that love is. Your poem is a monument to that natural state of our being and a preparation for the next love which will hopefully prove lasting The important thing is that your poem preserves what is best in us] our capacity to love deeply and truly.

When I read this poem, my mind immediately went to the metaphorical sea of distance between lovers when they can't communicate properly...even when sleeping in the same bed. Of course, in the literal sense this poem could also speak of a divide as experienced in long distance romance. I like the rhyme and rhythm of this writing...it isn't too much and the separation across incomplete lines with the rhyme leads the reader on through to the end of the writing. I enjoyed this very much. Thanks.

good, emotional rollercoaster

Perhaps this poem appealed to me for I have had that over the ocean romance...the misunderstandings, confusion that often happens is beautifully captured by your metaphors of words flying through the air and scattered pigeons. I love this poem...I may be a bit bias on this one but I'll justify my 10+

.....but I still prefer my own Sultans of the Ottoman poem! I guess it's tricky to truly experience a poem when you've not felt that exact form of pain/love/separation/loss/longing etc etc In this case I have half felt what you describe above, but in feeling so I realised it wasn't as true as I'd thought, rather it was an illusion that couldn't sustain the distance, the picture didn't quite fit the frame...but thank you none the less Tan :)

Even better. I loved the original one but this is outclass. Indeed feelings do subside with time. That's the tragedy of life. Beautifully penned. It strikes a universal chord.10

It is sad that some romances end - still that sometimes is the nature of love.

This poem speaks the truth: it doesn't offer false hope and it doesn't wallow in grief. It just gives a persuasive account of thr mysterious power and neccesity of love. I always say to myself EVERY PAST DESERVES ITS FUTURE. It's simply not true and you confront the failure of such impossible hope wyth dignity. You are both affirming the existence of LOVE and asserting its seemingly random actions.

Hi, Tan. You were right; I do like the poem. Very much! I love the imagery in it. So vivid! And some of the lines really stand out: currents of guilt! Looking forward to reading more. Thanks for inviting me to read your poetry. Quite a wonderful adventure.