A Beautiful Child Comments

very touching incident that has inspired you to write such a lovely poem. vaibhav, some little things happens in our daily life which leaves a mark forever.good write, keep it up.

that's a nice story indeed..I liked such a narrative ones..enjoyed it very much..moving and touching10++ regards shan =

soft chuckle, nice perception of a poor child!

Sure, She is very beautiful. I agreed. Keep writing more

This is a well expressed poem, Vaibhav, and from the length of several lines, I can tell it was one of your earliest efforts. When writing poems in verses, it is not effective to have one or two lines of extreme length like was done in your final verse inparticular. It is preferred to have lines of roughly a similar length, though they do not have to be excactly the same length. This is were the delicate art of editing and rewriting comes in. In your longer lines, you should try finding shorter words to use, or to delet which words are not necessary, or simply re-phrase the line to be shorter. You will learn all of this in due time, but for an early effort, I am impressed with how this poem is expressed. Carl.

A very beautifully written piece, my friend. its definetly worth my rating of 10 words put down with such feeling tends to send my heart reeling! check out capt.paranoid, find the hidden message

A nice thought. In a child's eye a penny can buy dreams.

Such a poigant illustration of the beauty of innocence and youth, , , , seeing this picture reminded me of when I wrote 'Little Boy On The Bench' and 'Daughter'....

Beautiful heartfelt poem. Please keep writing. Jim

yet the cry of innocence on the corridor of poverty tears may glean to eyes as she begs for a penny to buy her dream, wonderful write heart touching, wellpenned,10+++++, thanks for sharing

You are also beautiful inside. You give that child happines, if only for one day. Your being generous will one day be blessed.How blessed i am to have you as one of my friend.Shalom! Hugs, Meggie

A really lovely piece Vaibhav, a touching write. Best wishes, Andrew

The feeling is truly worth writing. Immense understanding both with the poet & his thought...10+

The feelings of the child have been expressed beautifully in the poem.

The beauty of innocence; the beauty of tender hopes; the aspirations of downtrodden; all in one in this beautifully worded poem

The true beauty of that child is her innocence and indifferent mind....they are no wonder referred to flowers, a very touching write....!

A beautiful moment captured in verse. Well done my friend, well done indeed. A 10. Best wishes Richard

she received a penny for 'your thoughts' and not in reverse. very good write

Well expressed oft the naivety of childhood.

Can she get us the same deal on that car? Very nicely done.