A Attempt To Lie Comments

t did not pinch me when I attempted to lie It never occurred to mind and raised the question, why? I had no symptoms of feeling shy.. it should nt be taken lightly....10

An attempt not A attempt (a is a vowel) & if you start in rhyme it must rhyme to the end.

Was it going to remain as one time affair? I did not consider it proper and fair I knew one day I will be called liar..can ruin u any time....10

It is game and there is no win The unrest may be clearly seen Until you go and accept the guilt The inner peace can’t be built This particular part Stroke my heart A truth So painful no human can survive it Without it affecting your life A wonderful poem, my thanks to you for charing it

Not all brave people can perform this feat It requires some talent to beat You must be in position to catch on the heat Your eyes may not be in position to meet One word.. Brilliant..

I read this poem and the writer has a very good theme and a classic structure. However, this particular poem could be much improved over time. My suggestion is that the writer try making it shorter in general. I can see a lot of suggestions that I might make, but without consulting the writer first I would not make them. --- Greenwolfe 1962

A treatise, a dessertation on the inner conflict and the innate being of the human spirit and soul.it is a picturisation of the possible attainment of a blemishless spirit and a blisful soul. But this world is too much complex and an individual is fickle and feeble before its oddities. inspite the soul dares to reach out for the impeccable and the impossible. that is attainment of blissful conscience which is possible only by being true to oneself and his surrounding world. its almost a theatrical drama of the conflict between Satan and God. Both are perhaps equal. But they differ in only one aspect. that is 'truthfulness' and 'falsitude'. A poem that cracks on any one to look deep into oneself and beyond! Yours lovingly P.Bose 07/07/2010

I loved the message portrayed in this poem. One must think about the consequences of lying even if at the moment they believe there won't be any. Good work: D

I t has a very good message we all should try to avoid lies as much as possible.

It did not pinch me when I attempted to lie It never occurred to mind and raised the question, why? I had no symptoms of feeling shy It was desperate but worth try... it must pinch in any case.. nicely prsented....10