Saturday, August 8, 2009

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Rating: 4.5

a clutch of nothing, you wish
for the dream to return, to
feel the tip of touch and let
the fingers dance mad once
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Ben Partenay
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Jono Casuyon 26 September 2013

All-in-all the poem got me, especially the last four and you finished with an intriguing ending. Great job!

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Mark Money 26 September 2013

this is not cookie-cutter stuff. this is original, and original is what we need in today's world. great job.....keep posting! !

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Shirley Woods 08 August 2009

Hi Ben, Wow! Some brilliant thoughts in this - love the bit about where dreams go to die! It's great to read something so different

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