5.58pm Comments

Quite an excellent poem.. In a very few lines it describes so many things...

Lives, Many you can imagine beyond the four names... clearing away the debris to a laconic newsreader's voice-over. Lovely poem.

Such a powerful write, so much said in so few words. Brilliant Martin.

all life and death in a few lines of poetry jus like a news bulletin and really quite poignant...

Very clever and well written a snippet from a moment in time juxtaposed yet connected...fantastic write. -SG

One twitch in concentration while driving a car and the time line can and will be irreparably altered. One second, one life time. A good write.

i thought it was going to be about cocktail time but rather much more disheartening. its made me feel quite sad.

A great summation of the way the modern era makes us seem as insubstantial (and as long lasting) as ghosts.

Very chilling indeed. Succinct and skilful. Brilliant ending.