419 Words... My Old Home Comments

This poem is so, very well done. It has a fluid motion, which is good. Bien!

A broken dream Of no food to eat Of no water to drink Of no where to sleep All stories perhaps start from here.A very good write.Proven ability.

very descriptive, well written, bittersweet journey though. Thanks for sharing..

great poem, check out my rap lyrics you might like..

Wonerful word craft and flow. I love this poem and as I sit and close my eyes I can see it all through the words you have written, Great write :)

Very passionate, wonderfully worded with deep meaning.

What a picture you paint with words. I could see it all as I read. I agree what a journey touching so many emmotions. Really great write. Thank you for sharing.

Thanks for taking me on a journey with you back to your old home, I saw the sorrow, the pain and also the elation when things got better. A very good write.. Lynn.

I love it veary visual extrordinary!