Thursday, May 8, 2008

4 Photos In A Drawer (Not Forgotten) Comments

Rating: 5.0

Photo 1
Baby sits
with diapered bottom
against gritty linoleum
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Callie Carroll
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John Brown 18 March 2014

An intriguing poem indeed, and an unusual format.

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Ronel Mccarthy 11 November 2011

Very deep...yet so real with real emotion expressing the crude realities of life

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Alison Cassidy 01 January 2010

I can see your photos, Callie. You describe them with such clarity. And you use your words sparsely too, which I like. Nothing over done. In particular, the following lines stood out: 'scent of cotton scorch fills her nose'; 'Stair-stepped for posterity Almond eyes and forehead frizz' 'a careless spill of pills.' Interesting your use of the name 'Beauty'. There is irony in the name and pain in the telling. Fabulous poem. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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Heather Starfire 29 October 2009

Cool idea for a poem! And interesting execution.

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Alex Nodopaka 26 October 2009

A chrono-illogical portrait of the artist as seen from an Rx bottle. I'm glad you handled this write as a pro.

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Sonya Florentino 28 July 2009

i love this photograph poem! i don't know if it's about you but somehow reading photos 3 & 4, Marilyn Monroe came to mind.... :)

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Patrick A. Martin 14 July 2009

Some one cluch my heart in both hands before it falls apart completely. Thank you Callista for your photos. What a special read this is.

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Thomas Courtney Iii 06 June 2009

Hi. Yes I would say this is a lovely poem. I am still struck by the depiction of the 4th picture, I need a moment to recover. Very powerful. I really likie it. I thought your poem was like one of mine. I'm not trying to promote my poem, but perhaps share it that possibly you might enjoy it. (It's not long.) Blessings, Tom Courtney Stand on the Rock Boy stands easily on the smooth flat rock Pond shines around like his first set of teeth and the mountains of sky and the razors of conifers surround Sunbeams press his skin and drown the phantoms of a sleepless night in winter For a moment he thinks, I am whole He looks from a thin rutted trail looping their campfire to the girl. He smiles for the thin black glass she holds she cradles in slender fingers She snaps the shutter flies across the light He shifts his stance, I am your baby you married me Come step over the moss in fumbling hands and faces rounder smoother wetter pressing sunbeams from the corners Now the plastic rectangle pressed in plastic strangles memories of him and her And half the photos discarded and half and half again the scenery then hands and feet at the hands of unknown strangers Boy opens again the large slick binder A long time ago and far away she holds the camera

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Naseer Ahmed Nasir 28 March 2009

4 photos, four chapters of life. You have wonderfully recreated the life in this rememberance, callista.......10/10. Regards Naseer

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Bill Thomas 17 January 2009

Wow. Poignant, deep, sparsely enough written to let the imagination fill in the details - excellent, Callie!

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Scarlett Treat 25 October 2008

I am now and have always been, interested in old photographs, because I always wonder who they are, what the story of their life is...why these photos wound up in an antique store, a thousand miles from home? But you have taken the '4 Photos in a Drawer (Not Forgotten) and built a perfect story around them. What a wonderful write!

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C. P. Sharma 05 October 2008

The poem reflects your poetic caliber. Awesome portayal of the shades of life. Heart touching.

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<font color =fusha>Amy 19 September 2008

such a great poem- keep writing!

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Sadiqullah Khan 16 September 2008

great insight into the photos, , , , , , , , but they are so much the reality, , it reminds me some of my lost phots, , so precious, , will i get them back or i right about them whatevere i remember of them, ,10

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Saint Cynosure 12 September 2008

This is really good, if and when I vote 10s are rarely given but this is deserving of a 10...

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Kyle Shield Laster 27 June 2008

'south pacific'... a fellow insomniac and theatre junkie. greatness! great write.

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Original Unknown Girl 26 June 2008

Beautiful evocative poem. Enjoyed reading. HG: -) xx

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O Anna Niemus 03 June 2008

this is a beautiful classic poem the lines of the baby basking in the mother's glow ... and the spill of pills are 2 of the many gems thank you

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Joseph Poewhit 08 May 2008

That last photo 4 really caught that place in many a persons lost sorrows.

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Bill Smith 08 May 2008

enjoyed reading this, I like the way you linked the four snapshots together and as above the line 'she doesn't know the begining of her sorrow 'pulled me into the rest, excellent piece, cheers Smiffy

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