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Sorry to say it, but this is not a poem. It is a piece of prose written in short lines. You don't have to use rhyme, but there has to be some rhythm or flow to it.

the concept behind the poem and the feel is good, but what i feel is as a poem it would be could if you can use some rhyming and flow in it...

Well, goodness..... it is certainly to the point, a bit brusque... but a nice poem never the less.