32 Senryu Comments

Athul, while I liked your poem, I have to remind you that a haiku should contain three lines and 17 syllables, with 5 syllables in line 1,7 syllables in line 2, and 5 syllables in line 3. Haiku should also have references to nature and seasons worked around one key word usually placed strategically in the second line. A poem in this form that discusses one's self, sometimes in a humorous way, is called a senryu, which your poem is actually closer to. Keep writing! ! ! :)

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