.24) Forever Comments

Hello Max, I enjoyed this poem - you have a wonderful way of expressing yourself. I look forward to reading more from you. Warmest regards, CJ

I really liked this poem Max.. Sweet and enadearing memories of childhood that last forever.. well done! HBH

Max...this is lovely...the moments that stick with us seem to find their way back inside us! May our wonderous childhood stand clear...forever....I enjoyed the nostalic musings in this.

Very sweet,10+. I didn't see 'dispatched' anywhere, so I guess this poem has already been fixed. Looks like a good change, I definitely liked dispatched up poem.. -chuck

Yes, this evokes nostalgic memories and is extremely well-crafted. I particularly like the first stanza. The second one is strong too. The only tiny thing that hit me kind of funny was the fireflies being dispatched. Is that really the word you want to use? Dispatched? By whom?

I dig the whole poem, but especially the first and final stanzas, and the poem really does capture the innocence of childhood that does feel like forever.

This is a beautiful image of a time in childhood with a pretentious name, 'Forever.' My only suggestion would be to bring up the word 'time' in the second line second stanza to finish the phrase in the first line. I think it would flow when read aloud. Thanks for this beautiful piece. Raynette

Made me think of when I was I child and we would be outside in the fall as tthe sun was going down.....good write.