20 A Wonderful Dream Comments

and you let that lady go with the thugs? in case your mother springled water on you, tonight you wear a water proof jacket and go dreaming. fight back the thugs! ... and never sleep till eight! for your age you are very talented. keep dreaming... keep writing.... all the best

Lacks depth and vision but u have plenty of time ahead of u to nurture ur potential the supposed surprising ending is a bit of a cliche in some silent movies.