2....Almost Alive....1 Comments

Wonderful piece, well and deeply crafted. Self discovery and realization for self actualization are those within the heirarchy of man if not feed and noted man could not move on with his life. Fine choices of words also. a 10. Thanks.

the tire of empire, the poem from the sky, I love your style

To better understand this poem, I urge one to view the masterpiece 'the fear of man', these two poems are similar in structure and the reasons for that are these: they follow life's rhythm and they suit the needs of time etc. not as much is invested in the content as it is in the presentation, E.g.: |Miles of sand and stone, this is a journey that is taken by the speaker.|| A sight alone, this is as it states, we begin this journey of self discovery and self realisation on our own(perhaps even before we are born, which would suit the title, but in this case the birth is of a poem) ||mountains of mist. Alone I list...these are the moments one realises what is needed (help, guidance, friendship, love) and makes their way through mysterious territory to find it.|| the sights I see. Only me. So the speaker SEES himself and realises what he (IT) is, and then pursues what he needs to become, and to find another, to find a brother. [THAT IS THE FIRST STANZA] now we look at the last stanza to see if the journey is worthwhile and if it is indeed complete. ||It’s time. No please wait! The line is simple but has a lot of depth, the speaker decides that the time to become (alive) is near, but another force[(external) it was introduced in the second stanza] tells the speaker to wait, implying that we can only go so far on our own and that external forces, whether good or bad must catalyse our transformation. The countdown has begun and now we anticipate a new emerging entity BUT the speaker gets to understand that without his mystical companion he cannot be complete, so he begs them to come along. Mimosa: a tree with yellow flowers that are sensitive to touch (it likes moisture) [trees are growth and long life and warmth etc] Summarrie: this is a name I gave to the North Star (the brightest and biggest of all stars) [certainly stars are for direction, light and intergalactic or universal connectedness)

Hi Nkuli, i just read almost alive, i must and i know for sure that the thought meant well and to inspire, but you couldn't project that thought. I will have to realy analyse it further to my understanding, and then you tell me and other readers what was on your conscious when you penned....no score for now....

I had to give this a 7 because I wasn't sure it was a recommendation. I have so many doubts about it. It could really be good. If it had a clear meaning. GW62

wow, what an amazing piece. I am still analysing it - might take forever but I am enjoying the ride :)

wonderful poem, ............. 'faith when commiserates the swing as you sway trudguing the path of life green even being alone in the midst of nature`s gleams, yet of ingenious delight by the mountain`s muse crisping across the vale of mystery by the nature`s reality' .........., well penned,10+, thanks for sharing.