(141) You And I Comments

Hello Prem-ji Is it drama-in-real-life-compostion? dr. sakti PS Ten++

Original, compelling, and deeply felt, this beautiful poem about the love and loss of a sister brought a tear to my eye. The use of the 'camera' to introduce the picture that inspired the poem was most effective as was the angst of the final line ''With your snap about to fade...' I also particularly liked the following phrases: 'Prisoner and imposter of Light and shade...' 'Empty eyes, mine, crawled through Your head without even a single hair.' Sometimes it takes tragedy to bring out the best in the poet. It is certainly true in this case. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ You end your poem with angst With your snap, about to fade....

Your beautiful sister lives in the stanzas of your heartbreaking poem. Deeply touched, dear Premji.10/10 Warmest regards, Sandra

What a wonderful write, so powerful, so optimistic, such an unexpected end.. Take care, Martine

well written.............sigh.......

the pain and grief that has no remedy, it is truly painful.

dark dismal and dreary....but written well....in its genre its like very good pain an anguish well portrayed cheers

pain...........................' sandhya

love, loss, pain, loneliness, grief all takes its toll. deep anguish very poignantly expressed Premji. I am overwhelmed. you loved your sister deeply and suffered with her. Mamta

Tears, tears of salt Spears your words They split my heart, You have a legacy The heilooms she gave The snapshot may fade But, never will she From your heart! Her love and blessings With you shall forever remain! Leena

Couple of poems, some drawings And a diary with untold emotions, You left for me, to grieve all life. Neither you nor love, I remain all alone, With your snap, about to fade.... ------- strong poignant composition here...one product line says about pictures Memories last forever...10+++

Heavy lines Premji...tears from heart are relatively denser...i submit before the dedication and love the poem carries inside...10

time, the stealer/time, the healer...

such wonderful moments r for cherishing forever.. lovely n heart touching...

Some moments are really precious, premji.10