137. How I Would Describe Me Comments

it's great thought about thy self and the inner self // great writing on birthday of your true self

I like best the sixth stanza: I cite here: My honesty is a radiant beacon shining like a miniature sun it helps my truth stay pure through this life never dimming or even going out......................Most beautiful and very sportive poem about the self. I like to read the whole poem very oftentimes.I must say this is an excellent poem. Thank you for sharing your talent with us.

Witty introspective poem written with clarity of thought and mind. A beautiful creation. Thanks for sharing John and do remain enriched.

My loyalty is a lovable dog. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

Wow! Excellent poem. I wish your success. Thanks a lot dearest poet John Westlake. Be well always.

The only thing that I can tell you about me is that I can't stop myself from giving a comment when a poem touches my soul and heart and I say, Loved reading the poem.

I like this poem sorry I LOve this poem..absolutely wonderful beautifully done :) a natural

Very metaphorical... like mines laid in parts of your mind tells me that you have a lot of hot buttons. Shotguns, battle fields, billowing volcanoes, and oceans to drown in - all things that you could project onto others. I find those parts of the poem rather sinister - TMI - if you know what I mean. But maybe I'm not seeing the larger metaphor. Is this poem - in entirety - something metaphorically different than a description of yourself? Having been written on your 30th birthday is relevant to that metaphor? With the arms and legs of scars to read - a library that others can not be bothered to read - I think you feel it necessary for others to know your temperament. But I disagree with your 'guess' in line 3 that you must explain yourself - you have no duty to explain yourself to others. I would try adding rhyme to this poem.

Something crucial got erased from my comment on HOW I WOULD DESCRIBE MYSELF, the second sentence should read - In my comments on your SPRING POEM I challenged you with the idea etc.

This is a brilliant poem! It succeeds as a vivid figurative and original portrait, admirable for the craft of poetry writing you display as well as the honest thorough disclosure of self. I challenged with the idea of a poem which both celebrates but also reveals its dangers - But that would produce a dissatisfying hybrid poem - B-U-T here you succeeded in portraying the multiplicities that make up Y-O-U. And there's even a stanza that echoes INTERNAL WARFARE, with considerable power. This whole poem is a model for its kind - the Self-portrait has been well served. It's a keeper for sure. Add it to the library of that impersonal creator-god in your FUTURE HISTORY poem so people can understand both the external and internal worlds of our human experience.

I read only one poem by you, by reading this pen picture you appear a straight forward, honest and truthful man and a poet who writes in a simple language and style and that is why your reader is impressed by you. I liked your poem because of its simplicity.

it’s time for the favour to be returned what will you tell me about you........it's a big task for me, needs time to think of how can i describe myself :) rate 10

A wonderfully deep description. I like your happiness and loyalty, much like myself. You appear to be filled with pain and painful wisdom. And everyone should follow the advise in your last paragraph. To put your self in words, to see for yourself as well as share with others. It can help a lot.

Describing oneself to others has always been a task for me. Like I lack words completely LOL. On your piece, I sure love how you've illustrated. Nice one, John: -)

This is simply wonderful...So much beauty is there in these words...I wish more people would think of themselves this way. An exquisite piece! Keep it up!

You're a master of similes and metaphors! What a dishonor we do to ourselves when asked who we are or what we're like; we simply say, I have brown hair, blue eyes, and I like blah blah blah... But the way you've done this...that's how you really paint a picture of who you are and convey it to the world. Going on my favorites list!

This is so clever, and every verse was so on point! I've done a poem called Introduction, but I think it has been totally beat out by this one lol. I really have no words to describe how awesome this is, so I'll just tell you my favorite verses. This one really stood out to me, being a library nerd and all: My arms and legs are a library ruined by several scars each one tells its own story of how it came to be but none can be bothered to read it I also enjoyed: My patience is a tranquil lake surrounded by many beautiful trees every tree is in full bloom in a variety of colours yet when the leaves and petals fall they make not even a ripple on the water there's always time in this peaceful place and none of it can be wasted by those who deserve it All together this is such an impressive write! ~Nika

love the poem john :)

Wonderfull poem, all the personifications are touching and deep and this part was my favourite: My truth is a shotgun let me give you both barrels a useful weapon in this life of deception because I have no space for lies or cheating no bull trash will ever stand in for it

Beautiful. You are a talented writer with an amazing gift. Keep writinng. It is by far one of my favorite poems. I hope one day that I am as talented as you are.