Monday, June 7, 2010

(1) Beyond Eden Comments

Rating: 3.2

Green leaves tap at my window like lost souls.
I trace their signatures upon the glass.
Dawn is only a few quatrains away.
I memorize the fragrance of spring rain.
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Sandra Fowler
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This beautiful poem is ranked #11 among the Best Member Poems featured on PoemHunter today. Congratulations to the poet.

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Dr Dillip K Swain 18 October 2022

Somewhere deep in the hills, a lyric bird Sings of the poignancy of humanness......beautiful expression dear Sandra! Loved this wonderful poem. Top score! !

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Sara Beck 18 August 2022

Absolutely beautiful….

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Martin Greyford 23 June 2022

lovely piece of literature penned down dear poet 10+

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Beautiful poem with the biblical story in the background. Nice rhyme and meter. The image of Adam taking out the very first tears of Eve is marvellous. The metaphors of "the fragrance of spring rains" et al are captivating and speaking directly with the heart of the reader..

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Rajesh.c Bose 17 October 2014

WOW... green leaves tap at my window like lost souls......inspiring... elevating

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S.zaynab Kamoonpuri 21 June 2014

A marvelous poem in imagery n words, enhanced by the take on Eden, Adam n Eve. Great freeverse style! Pls review my latest poem too.

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Yash Shinde 28 April 2014

Somewhere deep in the hills, a lyric bird Sings of the poignancy of humanness. The ever freshness of that ancient sound Brings back the sun that shone aeons ago. ................... .................A beautiful stanza... I loved the way you wait for time to slip and dawn to come, the last stanza is a perfect ending, a perfect beginning I must say........A beautiful deep write...

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C. P. Sharma 08 June 2012

Intermingled in Nature when the soul sings the timeless measures of love in different births divine music reverberates through them. Dear Sandra, your poetry is superb, it stands as a class apart.

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Robert Howard 16 May 2012

Absolutely beautiful! What a unique moment. Adam and Eve have blown it but Adam's love compels him to tenderly wipe away Eve's tear. After the fall, they were still in it together and so are all of us.

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Kesav Easwaran 10 July 2010

This write is poignant...reads sad...reads sweet...colourful words...picturesque poem canvas...10

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nomad omnia 03 July 2010

Hi Sandra - evokes those times staddled between dark and dawn, when we sit alone waiting for the sands of time to run...minds wandering back through times lang syne, experience making sense of it all. The blessedness of imortal birdsong underlines the score perfectly. love Nomad

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Marieta Maglas 18 June 2010

Very enlightening. Vividly written and interesting to read. Excellent poem.

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Indira Babbellapati 14 June 2010

from grief to hope n from hope to grief how we all skip hop hop skip! ...n to have that support all through!

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John Oconnell 11 June 2010

THIS RELIGIOUS POEM SPEAKS FOR ITSELF IN THE FULLNESS OF ITS HUMANITY AND IN THE AESTHETICS OF ITS FITTING FORM, 10 KINDEST REGARDS AND A GOOD WEEKEND, JOHN

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Uriah Hamilton 10 June 2010

may this lovely lyric reach to Eden and to every beatbeat shared between a man and a woman.

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Nimal Dunuhinga 10 June 2010

Somewhere beyond the hills I hear that bird's lyric song of souls.

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Raj Nandy 10 June 2010

DEAR SANDRA, YOU HAVE REACHED A LEVEL OF EXCELLENCE WHICH VERY FEW HAVE - WITH THIS POEM OF YOURS! INFACT IT COULD BE PRESCRIBED IN THE TEXT FOR ENGLISH LITERATURE FOR STUDENTS TO WRITE CRITICAL APPRECIATION FOR THEIR SEMESTER EXAM! Why don't you submit this at - 'poetfreak.com', where membership is free & a wider section of readers will benefit? ! Best wishes, - Raj

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premji premji 09 June 2010

dear sandraji Somewhere deep in the hills, a lyric bird Sings of the poignancy of humanness. marvelous lines..... you tell me that every poet is a lost soul...... love premji

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Maria C. Pires Costa 09 June 2010

We think 'the fragrance of spring rain' is pervading across these beautiful lines. We also perceive that 'a lyric bird' is the core of your poem, conveying much hope to you, reminding you of glorious, happy days in the past: '... brings back the sun that shone aeons ago.' Once again, dearest Sandra, your lines have touched our heart, adding to inspiration. Thanks a lot for sharing it. Maria

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