046. I Need A Submarine To Patrol The Sky Comments

Funny and cute, like the rhyming :)

the third stanza could be smoother, in my humble opinion. yes, as the previous 'commenters' point out, you are creative, and i like the rhyming, but this poem is juvenile compared to some of your other poems which are truly outstanding. but then, we poetic geniuses must have some juvenile fun sometimes! thanks for sharing. i am curious about your poet's note. bri :)

Brilliantly creative - I really enjoyed this poem!

I love this piece. I can imagine them in my head. REALLY FUNNY! You are so creative!