Monday, July 11, 2005

0393 Veterans' Day Comments

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The veterans of the last time
die off one by one
with a smile
and bitter memories
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Michael Shepherd
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Mr. Shepherd, a pretty good peom but I got confused with the whiches. Grammaticaly theyre somehow off. Am I jts being dense? Ive read the poem several times and I get stuck in the which parts. I like the conceopt of the poem. P-Snob

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Uriah Hamilton 11 July 2005

I hope those in the first stanza are considered more fortunate by all but there is a loneliness rendered by endurance.

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Michael Shepherd

Michael Shepherd

Marton, Lancashire
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