[03] And She Was Comments

a beautiful so well written poem

beautiful. it sounds so lonely, and i love the section about the breeze. well done. With respect, Abby

Nothing went off, a train left And she was into the train., , , , , ns lidw goes on with or without companion. it is real life... beautifull y said.....10

it was a wonderful poem.what ever happens life has to go on it does not stop well done keep it up.

a life of all existence well depicted....10

A picture painted, Of an hot dry still afternoon Numb in limb he stands Watching the train pullout, Strokes of blue brown & black A sad and stricken heart & face, All with the brush of Poetry! Brought to mind so many Rustic stations, distant places And many of our own goodbyes! A very true picture painted With heart and soul and pain. Angel

Time was settled into the legs Like the roots of a large tree. So good lines...10+ for them...Brishti Mazumdar

a beautiful poem that artistically brings in color, imagery and nature into masterly effect...

Great lines! Beautiful work!

So much compressed into so few words! Wonderful! People come and go out of our lives, Sun rises and sets, rain falls and stops; though certain moments remain etched forever in our memories, in an overall sense all that happens is just as per the expected order of the universe.

Great emotion to your work...excellent job....Jeff

such a elegant write... thoughts' provoking.... really a well crafted piece... 10+++

Such a large meaningful story in so few words, word work chiseled with skill++++++10 regards

Beautiful and so picturesque!

Apparently, nothing happened.The nature waits solemnly the train departure Time stops to start again with the departure of the train..Two persons have been separated. Two people are breaking in their love.Nature is personified: .''A sparrow was crying somewhere/Breezes were walking silently.'' Epithets of color appear, very suggestive, that emphasizes the painting of the nature: ''dusty yellow leafs''.We expect the tear, but, no, it looks like rain. A beautiful poem.(and my little 10 is there)

a beautiful write.........you have made where she was get into..........

there is something very nice about this poem. i love the fresh approach in getting us to feel for the passage of time. keep this up ashra.

tht 1 ur writin bout is waaaay too luckyy....(:

a lot of room for rambling ambling and maybe goin off the tangent altogether.. evocative...deep and apperas focused and purposeful...yet ellusive...sometime this is a cherished poetic pinnacle solid write...cheers

Your images truly evoke strong feelings and leave a lot of room for the imagination and interpretation. Well composed.