008. Egyptian Morning Comments

Ahan wow what an interesting poem described ribed well on the pyramids, one of the spectacular wonders of the world. U wrote it with a skillfully poetic pen and captured the scenes well. U must have visited Egypt a very historical place to be in ah. Kudos and great to read u again.

Very descriptive. Can picture it very clearly. Thank you

A very descriptive poem. I love history and poems that poems that help bring history to life. A similar poem could be written about many points in history, but I believe the pharaoh is rarely as ignorant of the pain he causes. Darla :)

This is beautiful. I love the way you make me picture everything in my mind although I don't know what all those things look like in reality, I mean I haven't seen them myself. Great job! Keep up the good work!

I like the way you approach the theme of injustice indirectly rather than preaching in your poem. The image of the overseer is a sharp character portrait that shows us how helpless the slaves truly are; his malevolent stare will see even the tiniest glimmer of rebellion. And so the pharaoh can sit back, and bask in the EGYPTIAN MORNING, without a moral thought occupying his brain. This picture reeks with moral degradation without any special pleading in the language. That restraint makes this subtle poem all the more effective as a protest poem!

I must say your imagery is very nice. I LOVE imagery, and you're very good about putting lots of it in your poems. Keep writing!

Nice! Lovely imagery and a great topic. Also nice you make it sound like these times aren't a thing of the past :)

Who can resist a title like Egyptian Morning? I admire the way you immersed yourself in this subject bringing to life so vividly the harsh reality in such a colourful way.

i like it (quite a bit) . i wonder what prompted you to write this; i mean about this subject. hmmm? it didn't even have to have rhymes or humor to be enjoyable! well-written! thanks for sharing. bri ;) i like that you wrote in the 'present tense'. the last stanza 'might' be my favorite.