Neelam Kumar Sharma Comments

Hello Neelam. Thank you for your message. I think you have the making of a good poem there. I can only suggest that you shorten the poem and try to distill your thoughts into four or five stanzas. There is a forum for critiques on this site - perhaps you could post your poem there. Also try ABC Tales. They have a lively community of both new and experienced writers who are very helpful with feedback. Best wishes and good luck with your writing! Eddie.