I'm a teenager aspiring to be a well known poet.I would love your cricism on my poems.As well give me some helpful advice for the future.
The hard working mother...
Never sleeps or rests
Pushing until light falls
And pulling until day breaks
...
MY dear rusting diamond,
Who are you trying to fool,
You say you fall in love fast,
But all you do is use i love you as a tool,
...
what is p.a.i.n,
pain is power asserting itself now,
usually expressed in the traumatizing rain,
letting your soul and your mind allow,
...
Watch me,
Give me some attention,
Don't you care for your child,
Who shed streams of blood,
...