otidie damnatur qui semper timet - The man who is constantly in fear is every day condemned. (Syrus)
I write mostly for myself but I became aware that some people liked my writing. So recently (last couple months) I have started to share my work online. Feel free to critique my work. I encourage suggestions.
I play around with many forms, but I am a rhymer by heart. My style tends to be more literal and my work is often in a storytelling form. I write what I think and I typically post my work in first draft form so I really do want honest feedback. If it sucks tell me. I am here to improve my craft.
It would have been his birthday
If not taken before his time
Cut down way too early
Before he reached his prime
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Once a timid science teacher
Lost out in the private sector
Changed his life to deter
Family’s loss from death’s dark specter
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Staring into midnight sky
Vastness brings both fear and hope
Millions of light years separate us
Visible only with telescope
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Decadently sweet
Overwhelming treat
Unmatched ease
Gobbled up in a breeze
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