Ben Greene Comments

I don't know what type of poem this is, a poem for yourself, i.e something that you wanted to do for yourself and for your own personal reasons, in which case it is fine as is, or is it meant as a poem for everyone? If for everyone, personally i am having trouble understanding what's happening. I'm not very good at figuring things out though, so maybe its just me. If it is a poem for everyone maybe you could create a line or two that connect some of the ideas to give me (and maybe others who are just as poetically challenged) a chance to understand your work